I have a great idea for a novel. You know what would make it even better?…
A Scene from the Novel: The Alchemists’ Tower
May 24, 2012Posted by on
The path on the right led to the mansion, with its stained glass windows like bird’s eyes. Above the lawn, glittering in the last rays of light, circled the moon moths. Not green on this world, but a luminous indigo, they bite with long fangs that bind their prey.
Clovis bowed his head and folded his arms. With one hand touching each shoulder, he closed his eyes and said “Nothing in this world is made, but of atoms and the void. I believe.”
He walked on and did not turn. Ahead, the Alchemists’ Tower rose black against the evening sky.
This short scene is for the Friday Fictioneers flash fiction meme. Every Friday a bunch of online writers write 100 words on a given topic. In this case, the picture above. Then we link and comment on each others’ posts. Check it out here. Links to other peoples’ fiction should start appearing in the Comments to this post as well.
Criticism is invited! Tell me what you think of my prose. How can it be tightened up? Are you hooked? This could be the opening of my novel (yet unnamed – The Alchemists’ tower is what I’m calling the scene, not the book; that was a little ambiguous in the post title).
I’d be grateful if you stick around and leave your comments in the other posts and pages as well. The site’s called Stone Soup Novelist for a reason!